How is my musical so far?

Question

I have not added or wrote the songs yet but i will when I get the dialog written.Here are the first two scenes.
American Dream the Musical

Summary:
A long lost musical about issues that teens go through. And there is a big twist; these kids go through this long and real journey together through the time of music and fun.

Characters:
Girls: Boys: Adults:
Connie Tyler the teacher: Miss. Snap
Sandra Brad TV guy
Bailey Johnny classical dancers
DJ Fredrick


Act 1
The curtain is pulled back to reveal a class room full of teenage children. One girl is shown sitting alone in the corner. Three girls are talking, gossiping, and texting on their pink bedazzled phones.
Three boys in varsity jackets and football uniforms are talking about sports.

The spotlight reveals three girls talking and gossiping in the right corner.
Connie: Oh my goodness, I completely hate him.
Connie puts hands up to her chin and frowns.
Sandra: Oh don’t worry you’ll find a new guy.
Sandra seems very concerned for her friend Connie.
Bailey: Wait who are we talking about now?
Bailey seems very confused
Connie: Brrrrradddd!!!!!
Connie says while letting go and starting to cry.
The spotlight gets pointed over at opened pink door. And DJ walks in.
DJ: Oh, why are crying?
Seeming way sarcastically sad for her.
DJ: You should feel happy for Brad he found someone much better, prettier, and,
Brad says interrupting DJ
Brad: Hey baby what’s up?
Brad says as he walks over and hugs DJ.
DJ happily and meanly glares at Connie.
Connie barely holds back her tears.
DJ says to her friend and Fredrick is watching and listening from a far glance.
Connie: Well, I will just find a better guy!
Connie says in a sad but sort of self assured voice.
Fredrick walks over to Connie in a bit of a rush.
Fredrick: I’m available anytime baby!
DJ: Like that will happen.
DJ says to Connie
Bailey and Sandra: shut up, guys.
Spotlight points to lab room door
Miss. Snap walks into the room.
Miss. Snap: Ok, get in your seats all ready you little rats.
Oh my goodness, class, the best thing happened today.
I ran into my stupid neighbor Candy’s pink stupid mail box.
Then, I ran over that stupid little pink bike that belongs to my stupid five year old neighbor, Sandy.
Tyler says delighted.
Tyler: ha that was my sister’s bike.
Tyler slaps hands with Miss. Snap.
They both start laughing.
Bailey looks really angry
Bailey: Hey, be nice. That’s really sad.
Miss. Snap: Aww shut it, so back to this stupid schedule.
First were watching this stupid dance movie.
Like it or not, I don’t care. I’ll be off at Starbucks have fun.
Miss. Snap turns on the T.V and you can see the video turn on.
TV guy walks out from stage left and looks happy with a very cheesy smile.
TV guy: Hi everyone and welcome to boring music that your boring teacher is making you watch.
DJ: This is getting pretty good.
DJ says this in a flirty way to Brad.
Bailey: Oh my goodness
Bailey says this in an angry way.
TV man: So now let’s jump into the world of great music and happy stuff that your teachers make you watch. Even if you seriously think this crap is retarded.
The lights on the stage black out and the curtains close quickly.
End of scene 1
Beginning of scene 2
The curtain opens and the stage lights turn on.
The curtain reveals many couples dancing to classical music.
All of the teens are looking around and acting very confused.
Sandra: What the heck.
Brad: Where’s Miss. Snappy?
Bailey: I love snapping.
Bailey says this in a very stupid way. Bailey starts to snap.
Bailey starts to run around near the audience or stage snapping.
Sandra: Come on Bailey!
Sandra says in a very annoyed voice.
Classical sounding music starts to play.#
All of the couples turn and look at the 8 teen characters.
Dancer 1:Aren’t you guys going to dance.
Johnny: No, I hate classical music.
Tyler: Haven’t you guys ever heard of Hip hop.
Bailey: Yeah watch this
Bunny song turns on#
Bailey starts hopping across the stage.
All 8 teens: Oh my gosh
Dancer number 2: That is so not real dancing.
DJ: I agree with you on that. This is real dancing.
Hip hop music turns on#
DJ does a fast hip hop dance.
The music stops.
DJ: Now what did u think of that?
DJ says this in a very self accomplished voice.
Dancer number 3: Well, I liked the hop one better.
Bailey: Yes
Bailey says this very happily and punches the air.
Dancer number 4: Now this is real dancing
Classical music starts: The couples start to dance very impressively.
The 8 teens are standing in the corner watching in awe.
Bailey starts to dance with a monkey to she pulls out of her pocket.
Connie: Aw stop it bailey.
DJ: If you think that sneering is music. You will love this.
Hip hop music starts playing. #
The teens start hip hop dancing.
Bailey is still hopping around.
Dancer: that is so pathetic.
Classical music starts.

Answer 1

if its a short musical its okay.



If its something you want on broadway it needs alotta work.



Its better you hear peoples views first so it was smart to ask on here.



What i say isn't supposed to be mean just what ithink aboutt it.



first of all i personally don't like the second scene it sounds too fake



The teacher sounds very fake and the dancing secnee really amateurishh. Also the tv guy should be not the boaring video but the exciting video hes trying to talk to his aduience.



You should really add more to the brad and baily thing and make dj more mean and sluty. She took her boyfriend so shes not just scartastic she should be a mean whore.



you should also add on to the girl it the conner. Shes just left out of everthing. if its a a drama kinda thing that girl should be picked on and she ends up killing someone in the end. i think how she should go is that she is always left out and always sad and people pick on her for no reason. Just never let her seem like she has anger make her seem sad. Let her get caught too. Horror plays where they don't get caught are mostly dumb. That can add up susspence. Add more to it and re-post it. If you want then i could telll you more

Answer 2

Most of my lifestyles has been in Musical Theater. My youngest daughter on the second, is in "Chorus Line". We party each 12 months, regardless of wherein we're, and appear on the Tony's in combination. There is not anything adore it. Funny Girl, Mame, Hello Dolly, Joseph and the Technicol Dreamcoat, Les Miserable - one would move on and on. When we went to peer Mama Mia, the film, it was once a extraordinary revel in. For the primary time in a film Theatre the complete viewers took facet. They stood up and sang, danced and we had been all a facet of the film. Music, personally, is without doubt one of the benefits which have been bestowed on Human Beings. My lifestyles might no longer be what it's, or has been, if it was once no longer for track and Musical Theatre, on movie or on level.

Answer 3

I loved it!!!!